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I want you by ~rhuq:iconrhuq:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


Likewise the delusion of a thristy pedestrian
Through the seemingly long way of desire toward water
And reluctance of stepping ahead without it
I want you.........

With the wish of renovating your delicacy
I grapple your faith and behold the
Dazzling pert beauty which debars me to be persuasive
And I want you............

When the sun tries to reach the ocean
And mourn with bereavement, then in that very moment
With the thrist of getting touched
I want you............

With the sedusive attraction of stream to meet
The sea and with the temptation
Of re-ocuupying the realm of dream
I want you...........

When the moonlit night speaks of love
with the sinuous river water,
Then in that very moment
I want you ...........

With all my heart.
©2004-2009 ~rhuq
:iconrhuq:

Author's Comments

The desire and passion for getting the beloved is expressed .....here

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:iconpreetylux:
~preetylux Jul 18, 2004, 4:08:07 PM
aw I really like the last line.It brings it all together and makes it so passionate.be wary of getting too cryptic in your verses sometimes if a poem uses too many similies etc it takes away from the clarity and you need that n your poems.but i like this :clap:
:iconrhuq:
~rhuq Jul 19, 2004, 8:32:03 AM
Well, thanks a lot.
I will take of it later.
:iconevilgal:
~evilgal Jul 19, 2004, 8:07:53 PM
yeh i agree with preetylux .. its nice but too much comparasion tends to loose the melancholy of the poem

but nevertheless...i do like it :D

--
Evil=Bad
Bad=Cool
Therefore...
¯²¬EVIL IS COOL¯²¬ :chainsaw:
~Evil is just spelt backwards of Live!@#$%
:skull: :devartonfire: :skull:
:iconrhuq:
~rhuq Jul 20, 2004, 7:18:00 AM
Thankx.........:hug:
:iconfragilefish:
~FragileFish Jul 23, 2004, 10:16:02 AM
i love reading poetry written by someone with a larger than normal vocabulary. i have a small one so my writing is relatively medeocre to me. anyhow, i love the third verse/ stanza/ part (i never know what to call them). its my favorite part. i dont know why i like it better than the rest, maybe i just get a better visual.. but i love your style of writing, its amazing.
:iconrhuq:
~rhuq Jul 24, 2004, 11:36:33 AM
Thanks.....
I think u can write better than me.
:iconfragilefish:
~FragileFish Jul 24, 2004, 8:00:11 PM
....
really?
now your just trying to compliment me...
*flattered*
well thank you for the though... but... i dont know about that. i am my own worst judge, and that makes you the same, dont be to hard on yourself..
i think your writing is amazing and much better than mine.
:iconevilgal:
~evilgal Jul 24, 2004, 11:33:00 PM
np :glomp:

--
Evil=Bad
Bad=Cool
Therefore...
¯²¬EVIL IS COOL¯²¬ :chainsaw:
~Evil is just spelt backwards of Live!@#$%
:skull: :devartonfire: :skull:
:iconrhuq:
~rhuq Jul 27, 2004, 1:57:47 PM
Cool Lady !
Dont try to be the same by making the same praises toward me......
I am already in debt... hi hi......... :hug:
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