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I swear I will be there every time
When you need me
I will always lay my wings
Through your ways to comfort you


I swear I will defend and fight
Against all evil around you
I will hold you in my arms
When you shiver in fear

I swear I will be strong to protect you
From all kind of threat
I will rear your wishes in my heart
With all my love and life

I swear I will always be at your side
When you walk through pain
I will be there to take over all your pain and
Replace them with all my happiness….

I swear with love in my heart
I will never let you down
I will be there so that you may
Never feel you are alone

I swear I will be your love
And never let you feel sorrow
I will be the sinuous river
With songs for stars and you

I swear I will be in your faith
And man of trust
I will be the fascinating dream in
Your sleep when are tired

I swear I will feel the way you do
And never hurt your feelings
I will always ensure that
You can walk your ways with freedom

I will be your voice when
You intend to say something
I will be your everything
Even if you don’t want

I swear I will always love you
Till my death and thereafter
I will always be your best friend
You rear inside yourself
©2004-2009 ~rhuq
:iconrhuq:

Author's Comments

This is about the things I may want to swear to my princess.

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:iconevilgal:
hmm i think the second-last stanza shud be after the last stanza..cos that stanza is like the summery..cos all the other stanzas r sayin that im gonna do this n that...but that 2nd-last 1 is sayin im gonna do everything even if u dont want me to...u get wut im sayin?

anyhow...yeh the poems sweet...girls nowdays just die to get a guy like that hehe

keep up the good work.

--
Evil=Bad
Bad=Cool
Therefore...
¯²¬EVIL IS COOL¯²¬ :chainsaw:
~Evil is just spelt backwards of Live!@#$%
:skull: :devartonfire: :skull:
:iconrhuq:
I really wanted a critic to read the poem and suggest me. But u were not there for me...
Thats why I couldnt correct it. I submitted it even un-edited.
:iconevilgal:
aww sorry but yeh its still good...n u can still edit it here too..
keep up the good work :horns:

--
Evil=Bad
Bad=Cool
Therefore...
¯²¬EVIL IS COOL¯²¬ :chainsaw:
~Evil is just spelt backwards of Live!@#$%
:skull: :devartonfire: :skull:
:iconrhuq:
Thanx buddy.
Hows everything going?
:iconevilgal:
ur welcome..
everythings ok i guess

--
Evil=Bad
Bad=Cool
Therefore...
¯²¬EVIL IS COOL¯²¬ :chainsaw:
~Evil is just spelt backwards of Live!@#$%
:skull: :devartonfire: :skull:
:iconmemoriesofrain:
*gurgling sounds of a despairing last breath as she drowns in all the cliches*

... wait hold on, the last line... "You rear inside yourself?"
????

If you're not a native English-speaker, I apologize for being so critical. I just realized that if you weren't, that could be the reason for the word misuse and confusion. :hmm:
:iconrhuq:
Well, I am not a native English speaker. I am kinda trying to improve.
Its okay ........

Actually I am kinda accepting your criticism friendly coz friends are like mirrors........to correctify faults.

:handshake:

--
~~~~~
Dont worry, I am fine.
:headbang:
:iconredmatilda:
Hi,

From one emotional poet to another, I hope you have your princess to speak these words to, or will have soon.

Any time you want a real life editor, just let me know and I would be honoured to help.

Inge

--
redmatilda
:iconrhuq:
Hey,

Glad to meet you in DA ! I am really happy to get your offer ! Thanks very much !

--
~~~~~
Dont worry, I am fine.
:headbang:

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